jun's cinquain
shark teeth
like bits of hell
munch and crunch as it kills
painful and dreadful as death camp
killer
4 comments:
Jun your poem hooked me in and I think next time to improve on the second line because that doesn't really feel like it belongs in the poem.
Nicky
all round great poem Jun I think that the second line was the best
its a good poem I really liked it.
Cool Jun I really got hooked into your poem.
Maybe next time you should put more simile into It.
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