Wednesday, 2 May 2007

jun's cinquain

shark teeth
like bits of hell
munch and crunch as it kills
painful and dreadful as death camp
killer

4 comments:

nickey said...

Jun your poem hooked me in and I think next time to improve on the second line because that doesn't really feel like it belongs in the poem.
Nicky

nick said...

all round great poem Jun I think that the second line was the best

Sheldon said...

its a good poem I really liked it.

YEIN said...

Cool Jun I really got hooked into your poem.
Maybe next time you should put more simile into It.

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