Wednesday, 2 May 2007

jun's cinquain

shark teeth
like bits of hell
munch and crunch as it kills
painful and dreadful as death camp


nickey said...

Jun your poem hooked me in and I think next time to improve on the second line because that doesn't really feel like it belongs in the poem.

nick said...

all round great poem Jun I think that the second line was the best

Sheldon said...

its a good poem I really liked it.

YEIN said...

Cool Jun I really got hooked into your poem.
Maybe next time you should put more simile into It.

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